Gender and Society: Student’s Work

The question was:

“Should official Christian teachings resist current secular views on gender” discuss

Students were given this question as homework. There were no time constraints and students were allowed to use their class notes to help. I believe that students need to first of all develop their technique before removing support (notes) and adding extra pressure of time conditions.

They are currently doing their first mock exam of the year (November 27th) under timed conditions, so have had three months of practicing their essay writing technique first. The students are allowed to use their revision packs for support. By March next year students will do a full exam with no notes and under timed conditions, so this is what we are working towards. If students don’t have the technique, removing notes and adding time pressure will not support them in  improving their writing only aggravate the writing process.

These are three introductions for the essay (my comments can be seen at the end as footnotes):

intro GS.JPG

Examples of main paragraphs:

  • Green: Links to question
  • Yellow: Critical words

See how in this paragraph a line of argument is followed, evaluated and justified, yet very few names and quotes are used. You can show a lot of knowledge and understanding by exploring what you do know, rather than memorizing and rote learning large amounts of content.

para 1.JPG


  • Green: Links to question
  • Yellow: Critical words

para 2


  • Green: Links to question
  • Yellow: Critical words

para 3



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15 thoughts on “Gender and Society: Student’s Work

  1. Hannah Williams

    Hi Aimee, I am just about to start this topic with my lot, please could you send me a copy of this? With thanks

  2. Liz Jenkins

    This is so helpful, Aimee. Please could you send me a copy of this. It is so good to see work from other students to compare with my own

  3. Mary Richardson

    Hi Aimee,

    thank you so much for your fabulous resources and blogs……so very helpful.
    I would be very grateful if you could send me a copy of this essay if possible.

    Many thanks.

    1. Richardson, Mary

      Hi Aimee,

      Hope you are well.

      I would be grateful for a copy of this essay when you get a chance.

      Many thanks in advance.



  4. Jasmin Hans

    Hi Aimme.
    This is extremely helpful. Is it possible for me to get a copy please?

    Thank you!

  5. Tony

    Im new to teaching OCR Religious Studies and discovering your site has been mazing. Please could I get the full essay response.
    Kind regards

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